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Decided to share this here to see what the MyBB Community thought of my poem and writing skills. Please comment below.

Quote:I loved you but now you’re gone
My life revolved around your love.
I gave the world and only asked for love
But now that’s gone and lost.

It has been a while since I was single
The world seems strange without you.
I would do anything
Just to hold you in my arms again.

I know you moved on
You will replace me in a second.
But I cannot do the same
You were my heaven.

I may find someone else
Heck why not? I am young.
But I will always have a place for you
Until I die right in my heart.

I loved you like you were the world itself
Life is different without you.
I want to sit and cry
But I will not let myself

Look like you hurt me.
Baby I will move on
Forget about the hurt
Or will I?

Life is nothing without you
I never wanted to loose you.
We used to talk about our future
And kids that we would have

Now all of that has changed
Just in one day.
Today was my Friday the 13th
And so will be every other day

On which I do not get to call you mine.
The sun shined brighter with you
My heart shines like that sun
But now my heart is coloured grey.

Loved it!

Thanks Was very emotional at the time so I was inspired to write it

Nice poem dude.

Im confused, which poetic structure did you intend for it to follow?

(2012-03-13, 10:43 PM)Mebes Net Wrote: [ -> ]Im confused, which poetic structure did you intend for it to follow?

Damn free verse, how does it work.

Nice. But you should try adding a rhyming patterns to it.

Thanks for the comments. Glad some of you liked it.

@Mebes - It was not really trying to follow any structure. It was just a bit of free writing when I was emotional.