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Well, I really want to show you guys how much of a poet I am. If you've got suggestions and constructive criticism, great, post them. I'd appreciate it a lot. As for my poems, here goes...



1. Disease

Sickness lurks about
Consuming me
Draining my power
Enough so I can't see

The parasite sinking in
Infecting what's in it's path
Getting closer to my heart
And showing it's wrath

This parasite changed me
It made me weak
It made me fall to my knees
Pain all the way to the peak

I could not bear it
I couldn't take the pain anymore
It's time for me to rest
Being infected to the core



2. Inside Me

How is it like to be laughed at?
How is it like for you?
Has your life been called a joke?
Mines has, too
How is it like to be forgotten?
How is it like to be ignored?
Do you enjoy this kind of life?
I don't, and I've been bored.

Have you ever wondered
If your life has always sucked?
I've been wondering the same thing
But I just have no luck
Something's wrong inside me
And I can't solve the problem
Is there a cure to a bad life?
Everything I tried makes my life dim

I just need help
But no one's there for me
It's just sad when nothing is there
To help pay the fee
I'm on the one-way trip to confusion
And there's no turning back
I only hope for another track...



3. Lack of Love

Love
That is all I need
For my loneliness would be freed
And then I would be glad

Love
It is what I'm searching for
From the sky to the floor
I lost my touch I had

Love
This is something I lack
This is something I need to track
Each and every time I try
I just end up with a cry
A cry telling the world I'm sad

Love
This is something I'm looking to aquire
Love as passionate as fire
Something I need to get done
Before my life starts to run
And from there, it'd become a paper wad.



4. Angel

You are my angel
You are the the light,
The only light of my life
The one that doesn't bite

You are one I need
You can heal my wounds
They aren't hard to find
Even so soon

I feel so alone
I need your purity
To help me escape
From this obscurity
I've been through a lot
Through objects in my way
I'm a fighter
But I have no say.

I'm trapped in darkness
And I have no way out
With you there
I need not to pout
I have nothing to say
But that I need a hand
To help me out
From this quicksand
Would one do such thing?
I only hope for something.



5. Wind

The wind, our friend
Breezing gently by
He has emotions
Just like you and I

He can be happy
He can be sad
Sometime, someday
He may be mad

Strong wind gusts
Gentle air
The strength of the wind
Is something he wears

We care about the wind
He cares about us
We sometimes depend on him
For his mysterious gusts

He is like us
But not a human
We respect that
With all we can



6. Displeased

I don't like life
I'm sure you concur
No one should like it
I defenitely won't either
Looking at my past
Looking at my present
I won't like my future
It doesn't look pleasant

I'm displeased with my past
I'm displeased with my present
I'm displeased with my future
I'm displeased to the extent

I can't straighten my life up
I can't figure it out
It remains mysterious
A drought of thought will sprout
I can't let this happen
I must evade
I can't afford this
It'll leave me to fade

I'm displeased with my past
I'm displeased with my present
I'm displeased with my future
I'm displeased to the extent
I'm displeased with my life
Are you too?
We're all here for the same reason
To suffer through
To bow out to human sins and disease
I just wish we wouldn't live through these



7. Parents

It takes my mom
My parent who raises me
To test me to the limits
And its me paying the fee
How am I to survive this?
How am I to survive this torture?
How am I to crawl out of this mess?
Only god will know the answer
High and low, I've been searching
Only to come up with nothing.



8. Stay Away

Stay away from me
Stay far away
I could ignite
And nothing will be okay

My head has tension
You shouldn't go near me
If you mess around
You will end up like debris

Pray for your own safety
And stay the hell away
One costly mistake
And it won't be okay.

You think this is some silly game
You think you will win
Well think again

You think I'm powerless
You think you have the advantage
In reality, you have the disadvantage

Got something to say
Say it in my face
We will have a long chase

Go away
I dont want you here
Go away
And disappear



9. Unfriendly Changes

Life is unfriendly
Nobody likes its changes
They are only cruel



10. Lies Strike Again

It seems
For forever long
That each day
Something is wrong

There's nobody to trust
Especially nearby
Lies flying all over
And consumes me until I die

The more I trust
The more I hurt
There are too many of those
Who are just dirt

The pain raises once more
To the multiples of ten
Having the feeling
Of being slapped in the face again

There is not a mortal
One can trust
Lies strike again
And burns you to dust



11. Fire

Opening my eyes
Seeing a great beauty
Dancing in the wind
In front of me

Closing my eyes
Feeling the heat
The great beauty
Is coming near me

Opening my eyes
Awakening
In my bed
Feeling
The wrath of the beauty
All around me

Out of the blue
Comes rain
Falling onto us
To have the beauty slain

Waking up
In a different place
Tears forming in my eyes
Not forgetting the flame's face

Of beauty...

Wow. I've only read the first three but I must say, you are very good! + rep for you good poem skills.

As for "constructive criticism", from what I saw in the first three poems, some lines are quite a fair bit of talking. This kind of distrupts the flow if you know what I mean. Most poems have a general length per line but yours varies and makes a reader speed up (like I did) or slow down to match the rest. Perhaps taking away or adding a few words to each poem in places would improve this.

Other than that, great work. Keep it up.