i wrote this
Quote:i was happy, then i got sad,
knowing that you had,
your last straw your last day,
i got drunk i got mad
i got angry and nothing had,
made me happier then you.
save me now please, before i make worse ones.......
Please make worse ones? They're entertaining.
Indeed, quite entertaining
first out of 10 rate it xD
I made a song when I was sad.... Than I got crazy with it...
"An apple pie
A bright blue sky
A breezy meadow in July,
An ice cream bar
A shooting star
The sound of a steel guitar
I love the sound of rain
wearing a hat and cane
Tiffany window pane lovely to see
Frost on a window sill
The feel of a dollar bill
Vacations in Brazil fill me with Glee!
These are all the little things that make me smile
This is all the stuff that makes life worthwhile
Everybody knows the Holocaust was a lie
So let's sing about the things we like and Don't be shy!
A strip of lace, a pretty face,
Eugenics really makes the case
Counting sheeps, and froggy leaps,
Throwing stuff over my mom's jeep!
I love the feel of a grain
The screams of a man in pain
Blood coming down like rain, showering me!
That everlasting thrill, during the final kill
Body dumped in a landfill, get off scott-free!
These are all the little things that make me smile
This is all the stuff that makes life worthwhile
One day I will eat your brain and it'll be great!
So let's sing about the things we like and meet your fate..."
I used to write a lot of poetry ... here's a few.
MONOMANIA
Morose fingertips dancing across the carpet
Courting those profanities you muttered at departure
Whilst I derogate myself, so conscious of my acts
Adorn me with stars, bedeck me with letters
Hold me a wake or kiss me awake
Or at least see off the ghost of me
That lingers here with thoughts so impenetrable
Whispering afterthoughts of your impenitence
And impeccable, so impeccable you are
Within your guilting and within your greed
That I cannot detect nor dissect such circumstance
Until such a belated moment, impactless in its brevity
Here am I, impactless in my breathlessness
Lungs turned as hard as your eyes by the cold
A glimmer of a glint within my derangement
Return me to the life that I faintly regret
EXCRESCENCE
A sort of abrasion that corrodes my skin, my soul
Vulgarity within kindness within wordless dialogue
Extemporaneous movements that flicker through light
And my lashes, too innocent for my face
My vision is blurred and I can no longer discern
The words that you spoke from the daggers that lie
On the floor, still coated in my contemplation
Affection to disaffection to such gilded hearts
To execrate me, bewitching in your fragile hips
The beauty of your darkness that makes my heart flutter
With both fear and desire that desecrate what is
Left of my sensibility, left of my compassion
Malignity that cultivates me into a demon of the past
The roseaceous rogue that you are, so bewildering in your
Semblance of purity and justification and unfailing love
That devours the reflection I am forced to remember
WE ALL SAY GOODBYE
I am the rain and the stars falling down from the sky
I am the hollow light dancing across meteorites
I am the contemptuous redemption implied within lies
And the air in bitter whispers when lovers say goodbye
Find me in twilight images blazing through the trees
Of forests that madmen would slaughter to seize
You may hear my ultimatums with God in the breeze
And watch my fingers dance in sync with lost leaves
My reflection can be seen within heartbroken eyes
And the tears of my daughter as she's sung a lullaby
It was so naive of us young fools to deny
That inevitably, we all must say goodbye
wow now i feel even worse about how mine sucked compared to you two......
Just continue to practice. Even looking back a few years I hate what I wrote. Just keep reading a lot and keep writing a lot. Your improvement will be evident over time.
(2009-04-10, 12:26 AM)Bey Brad Wrote: [ -> ]Just continue to practice. Even looking back a few years I hate what I wrote. Just keep reading a lot and keep writing a lot. Your improvement will be evident over time.
Nah i was basically bored and brainstorming ideas for a new book.... came up with a good idea for a movie or a tv show but no avail... that showed up though...
Lol. Even yours is better than what i could do.